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Man, pull me on board, I have the talent, need the right peeps, and you my friend, seem like the guy.
What's up DFO! I'll be checking out your music today. I'll inbox you either tonight or tomorrow. Thanks for da love homie!
thank YOU man... foreal much love
Im loving your sound. lets talk. ima inbox you.
Hey Roy, hope all is going well with you up in WI.... if you get a minute, listen to my new track "YOU WERE MEANT FOR ME," I'd greatly appreciate some feedback. You can find the track on my profile, or on youtube: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rVXimWc_xQ4&feature=player_embedded
DFO, Thanks for the note and you are on my listening list. I have quite few on it at the moment, so thanks in advance for your patience....Keep up the good work....Roy
DFO: Here are my thoughts. Opening sound effects are interesting and create a mysterious effect. The recording of the vocal is excellent and the production is also very good. Props to the producer and engineer. Excellent job! While the production is excellent, the lyrics are not in sync at all with the production. There is a clear contradiction between the sounds used and the content of the song. Example - The sound effects at 2:27 are strange and weird, but do not reflect the lyric at all. The opening verse also contradicts the sounds. Overall, I love the sounds, but with this lyric, they are distracting and don't work. From a songwriting perspective, the title shouldn't be You Were Meant For Me as it is not reflected anywhere in the song. It's an unsearchable and unfindable song because of this. My sense is the writer is hurt (LOL) and is seeking revenge. I know it probably doesn't take a rocket scientist to figure that out when opening line is "Hey bitch I hate you, don't ever look at me". Although the opening line does set the stage for the song, most of the listening public is gone by the end of it because of the content. One thing great about music, it allows all of us to express ourselves and "get it out". This is a great example of that. Sometimes we write and produce pieces for a variety of reasons and not all of them are commercial. There are many songs I have written that I don't want to change or modify because it holds something more than commercial value to me. I sense this is the case with this song and probably no changes will be made. With that said, this will have limited radio, television or film success without a complete re-write of the lyric. It's one thing to "get it out", but if the writer is offering this piece to hear with a discerning ear, it has no chance because of the violent content. It is possible that the shock value of it could resonate with some and, with an accompanying video, become a Youtube hit. My recommendation: Don't change the recording and mixing of anything you do. You have lots of talent. Listen to the lyric and find sounds and beats that match it. Hope this helps, Roy
Its all me, I make the beats/write the lyric/ and mix all of it. .. thank you for your input, I def see where you are coming from on the lyric not matching the sounds, and you were right on the head with me "getting it out."
DFO, Keep at it man. As I told you before, you have tremendous writing and production talent.....Best, Roy
Do you know any labels that are currently seeking artists?
Hey may, Im DFO, the one who made "THIS TRACK" I really appreciate the review you gave me!! Any suggestions on how to market that or even how to start generating money off of all my instrumentals and vocal tracks?? thanks for your time.
so many ways man! will talk about it
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When you get a min , please check out "soulful", one my new xprmntl flip-hop tracks... your feedback is much appreciated thanks bro!!!
Its got a really low fi feel to it as it stands, I'd work in some reverb on your sequenced drums and master the highs up a little bit. From there I'd like to hear the guitar rage in a little more than it does. Its got grind, you should focus on that and find a way to bring it out in the mix more. Round 1:00 when you move into the next phase of your song I'd find a new timbre to drop in there, something on the higher end of the tonal spectrum that plays off the minors your using here. When you're doing the laugh thing, I'd slap on some echo effects and then pan them from one side to another to give a sense of chaos and madness. I like the low end hits, but feel maybe a more prominent bass rhythm would really help set this off in the second half as well. I like the rap flow, but some more backups aiding for added impact could go a long way if you want to get your audience into a grove and help establish your hooks. Hope it helps, got a great vibe going here as is, so don't take any of my thoughts to heart as if you've done something wrong... just ideas to build on what you have is all. If you choose to implement it all... you should easily be able to extend your track time to 3:30 by the time your done... Further adding to the marketability of this work. Best... N
Hey there Roy, when you get a quick 2:40, please check out my track, Murderer. thanks!
DFO....It's on my list....Christopher Dean and Valerie Prussak are the next two in the queue....Thanks for your patience, Roy
What'z good Roy ,I am new on here for the 3rd time , check 3 new tracks when you find the time to, thanks . Rayciano
DFO: Here are my thoughts on "Muderer". Hope this helps. Love the intro. Great analog opening hook....Intense background noise that sets up the song well. Heavy and violent lyric that makes the point and pretty much continues the aggressive mood of the song....Love the sound effect at 1:20, followed by different rapper. Good producing.....Interesting phrasing between 1:22 & 1:37, didn't get it at first and thought maybe you need to re-cut it. After a couple of listens, I get it and would leave it as is...."Black shirt, black pants, black....." - This entire section is great. Very innovative rapping and production.....Ok, here are my thoughts. This is produced extremely well, but the arrangement is not quite complete, yet. I think you have a giant hook with "Black shirt, black pants....". If I was producing I might experiment with the first few lines of this section, put it between the first and second verse, then add it to the end of the song and fade it. I can hear an arena of fans rapping this over and over again. It has an incredibly strong controversial lyric that sucks the listener in. The groove is infectious and with a slight adjustment to the arrangement, this is a radio hit. Your ability to create a vibe that is married to the lyric is remarkable. You clearly have paid your dues in the studio......Great work....One other note: I would change the name of the song to Black shirt, black pants as that is the most memorable phrase in the song.
Rayciano....Here are my thoughts on "Touch". Great intro, different, unique....I love the contrasting deep synth against the epiano..... Great distinctive tone to the vocal, but it's too up front in the mix....The first "Down" at 1:25 misses the note and should be re-cut. The hook, "Down, Down", is a great one with good phrasing from the vocal and a good arrangement. It needs a little more time in the editing room as the background rhythm seems a little lost here, especially the hat groove. I would re-cut and perfect this section as it is very well written, just needs an upgraded production..... It could start fading at 4:09 and out at 4:15, the rest of the song doesn't add anything. Probably still too long to get airplay and you may consider more cuts to the length....Pros: Very well written, strong vocal with great tone. Good sound selection and arrangement. Cons: Production and mix. The hook needs polishing. "Down, down" should be the title as that is the memorable part of the song.....Overall: I like this a lot and would love to hear it with a few tweaks.....Hope this helps, Roy
That is awesome to hear, foreal. If you have any suggestions on how to further publicize my work, that would be awesome, that seems to be my biggest issue. Also, on the contrast of that song, I have one more to beg of you to listen. I poured my lifes emotions into this one and your feedbacks are by far the MOST helpful and genuine I have ever encountered. It would mean the world . Thanks again Roy! :) the track is called "Dying to Eat" one love
Hey roy... hows things?? new track up, "grey"... if you find a min, let me know what you think.!!! thanks DFO
"Grey" Interesting, ethereal, quiet, mysterious......Whisper conversation between man and woman at 34 seconds, a couple of the phrases were hard to understand....Groove kicks in at 1:00, nice electronic groove, groove cuts at 1:57 with sweeps, bells and other effects entering....Nice effect at 2:26...Conversation returns at the end of the song...... Pros: The production is excellent, the soundtrack is tasteful and the sound selection is as good as it gets. Very wide range of sounds that work well together. Cons: This is one of those songs where I am not quite connecting with the intent of the writer. It seems the "sell" of the song is not quite getting there. I would spend a little more time building peaks and valleys in the production. It doesn't seem to have the energy during the builds, but that could just be my taste.....I would also work on the clarity of the whispers and possibly make them part of the groove.....Again, the mix and production are stellar, but I think the "song" could use a little tweaking on the arrangement.....I hope this helps.....Roy
I simply love "Trade the world." This track rules. Great elements, engineering, and wonderful sound!!! N
Hey whats up and how are you????
I'm well... Working on a wicked fun ad for 5 can right now. I'm sure the gang will laugh at the very least:) I love your work brother! Its a great track and really hits a home run. I hope to experience more like it from you very soon! Anyhow... Time to get back to that whole loopmaking thing, lol Be well!!! N
Wow, I cant thank you enough, thats awesome. I can assure you I will have all my other similar material up soon. Peace n Love. DFO
Aloha Roy-man! I have uploaded a track "Trade The World" onto my page. It is not for submission as of right now, more or less, I would really love your feedback on the art piece. Thank you so much !!!
P.s. how often do you visit Chicago?
Very interesting opening, not sure what the exact words are, but it is captivating and makes the listener anxious to hear the rest of the song. I couldn't stand not knowing, so I went to the song page and looked up the opening words. Maybe a little more clarity in those opening lines, but there is some suspense that occurs when you don't quite understand what is being said.....Interesting sound effects until the groove starts, then breaks and starts again, very cleanly.....Great instrumentation with strong kick drum at 54 seconds.....A quick vocal interlude at 1:07 states, "the US government killed 3,000 of it's own citizens" and now we clearly know what this is about.....Song builds to 1:12 where a killer guitar like sound comes in and dominates. The production up to this point is awesome and just keeps getting better and better as it progresses.....Great machine gun like guitar effects at 2:20.....The last 45 seconds of this piece is brilliant as the circus of sounds that are crafted and pieced together to near perfection slowly disappear. Without a word in it, one can hear the sounds of protest from the excellent work of the producer. The listener is mesmerized with a "Halloween" like chill, and the various effects, especially the guitar are simply "wow".....My only critique, and I'm digging here, is the break at 37 seconds may not be needed or could be smoother.....But honestly, I have to dig to come up with any suggestion for improvement.....Everytime I listen to this, which is about 10 and counting, I hear something new. This is clearly one of the best pieces I have heard in a while. You should enter this in the 6-Pack Protest Challenge as you would have a strong chance with this song. If you have more work like this, you have a good chance of winning the entire contest.....This is clearly talent. Great work!!....Thanks for being a member of Broadjam, Roy
Roy... THANK YOU SO MUCH! you made my year lol.... I just submitted it to the protest challenge. I did not know there was a place to throw that, it was simply me being me. I am seriously speechless. Have a wonderful week and keep in touch!!! -DFO
Roy, can I ask you what you think of my jam "reincarnation?" If you have the time that is.. either way though, greatly appreciated. If any, thats the track I'd absolutely love to go somewhere. !! Thanks!!
Great intro, love the texture. Instrumental, but very visual. I might have put more low end in the metallic splash, but that is really my taste.....Nice empty space at about 1:50....Love the guitar like sound at 2:35....Could use some dynamic peaks and valleys. For example - you have a nice dynamic change at 3:35, however the energy in the track is the same from 3:15 to 3:35. Tear it up, build the intensity, then bring it back....Overall, I like the feel of the track. If I was producing, I would work on the dynamics of the song and make the listener sit up and take notice when the intensity cuts out....You have a nice ear for sound selection. Very interesting and engaging mix of sounds and patterns......Good work...Roy
Thank you so much. I really do appreciate the time you took to do that. I will def work on those aspects as I am learning more and more about mastering. I couldnt agree more though.. take care and thanks again! -DFO
Feel free to send a note directly to Craig Anderton as well. He is our mastering engineer and is absolutely great at it. He can really help you prepare the material for a good mastering job. Keep me posted on your progress.....Best of luck, Roy
Hey Roy how are you? Hope all is well. I was wondering the estimated time it takes to hear back on licensing submissions from the time of the deadline?? I am very eager to know. Thank you so much ant take care... -DFO (derek ventresca)
DFO...Thanks for the note. It really depends on the supervisor. In one case, we have a person using music from a listing we posted in 2008....However, most of the time it's about 60 days.....We are making some upgrades and you will see more detailed feedback soon....Best of luck and keep me posted on your progress....Roy
BTW: I see you're in Chicago...You should come up and see us in Madison sometime.
Okay! I appreciate it.. I would love to come up to Madison some time to say hello. You let me know when. !!!
Do you play in a band?? Or you mean come up and meet you guys to chat?? Either way would be amazing lol just curious though. :)
I don't play in a band....I'd love to tho'.....My job has got me pretty busy....We have pizza every Friday at noon for anyone who wants to join us. Pick a Friday, let us know you're coming and we'll talk music....All the best, Roy
Hey Roy.. This site is awesome. Thanks so much man. (how do I check on a submitted song??)
DFO, Thanks for the note and being a member.....After logging in, click on the edit profile button on the top right of the page, click on my submissions....It should be there...All the best, Roy
Found it. Thanks Roy!
Great to be back! Thanks for everything you do!
Glad to have you back Renee... Best of luck, Roy
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Do you want to do a compilation?
Sure, Love your sound! Just let us know what you need us to do okay. Spyder
Well I could make a very inspirational audio file if you would be interested in vocalizing it? I dont know what it is exactly you guys do.
That sounds just fine to me... your intuition is leading you correctly...that is exactly what we do. Would be happy to see what I can do with the audio file.