Your performance on the mic was admirable. In fact, it was the highlight of the track!! The mix sounded Suppppperr clean, so props man. Your writing was definitely felt bro, so I think it is worth trying to push it. I would just consider a few tweaks to the arrangement and maybe the instrumentation overall. This reminded me of some experimental ish that Danny Brown would try and put on "Atrocity Exhibition", namely track #2.

Love the song

interesting song, rap is not my first choice of music, but compared to other rap this is on the upper end

Okay, the musical portion of this song is awesome, the vocals are beautiful, love the instrumental arrangement. Like, I really dig the music, and I'm kinda picky. But I would totally listen to this.